Monday, May 20, 2013

Essay 3: Final Draft

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Cuihua Lin
Mr.Hayes
English 100 [1:10-2:00]
5/13/13
Revise Essay 3
Word Count: 1321
To Make A Success of the Occupy Movement
             The Occupy movements not only appear at the United Stated, but also they appear in the whole world. [#1] The Occupy movement is an international protest movement which is primarily directed against economic and social inequality. People   hope to get more participation opportunities as citizens to the Occupy movements because they are dissatisfied with the society. Even though the occupy movement includes a diversity of people’s colors, genders, and political persuasions, the one thing they all have in common is that they, the 99%, will no longer tolerate the greed and corruption of the rich and power. They use different ways to achieve the movements and encourage the use of nonviolence to maximize the safety of all participants.  In “The occupy Movement Needs Real Leaders and Real Goals,” Akshara Sekar and Deborah Soung argue that leaders can help occupiers to keep the movements organizing and reaching goals; Similar to Akshara- and Deborah’s article, Laird Harrison and Michelle Nichols write about “the Occupiers Need to Mobilize Students and Unions to Succeed,”   which brings the students and unions into a greater responsibility of pushing the movement forward.  On the other hand, “In order to Succeed, the Occupy Movement Needs to broaden Its Focus” written by Maria Armoundian argues that the Occupy movement needs to push through the media to convey the Occupy movement. From the three articles which have different positions, I mention two big questions about the Occupy movement, which are “What does it take for Occupy to be successful?” and “Why do occupiers need to mobilize students or leaders?”
            The three articles present different positions on how the occupy movement can be successful. For the first question, I find that two authors who are Armoudian and Harrison and Nichols have different perspectives about the Occupy movements. Armoudian, a fellow at the University of Southern California’s Center for international Studies and the host and producer of the Pacifica Radio programs The Scholars’  Circle and The Insighters, has some perspectives on  how occupy is being successful. [#7] Armoudian points out that the Occupy movement can be successful through different ways such as the use of social media.  She believes that if the Occupy movement broadens its focus that it can be successful.  For example, Armoudian describes the success of the occupy movement as a political movement. She argues that protesters need to employ the media and launch initiatives for political movement.  She says that as a political movement, it should “begin with a spark-powerful communications, ideas and demonstrations” (Armoudian). This case shows what Armondian believes to be a way of encouraging protesters to have energy to keep going until they are successful, for a political movement can evolve into a true force of change.   I think that although Armoudian’s point is true, she mostly acknowledges the positive issues of political movement. She mentions that a political movement looks like a “historic movement”, which creates true political transformations. [#8]  She thinks that the Occupy movement should get through the media to convey the message in the United Stated or in the world. In her perspective, she argues that social media is an important tool, used by the Occupy movement because social media can help the occupiers to convey  communicate more information to different places.
             While Armoudian believes that the use of social media to convey information is helpful for the Occupy movement, Harrison and Nichols mention another perspective of the success of Occupy movement. [#2] Harrison, a novelist and multimedia journalist, works as a correspondent for Time and People magazines, and writes for many national magazines and newspaper; Nichols is a reporter. They argue that having students and unions can help occupiers make a successful Occupy movement because it boosts up the momentum of the movement. Having a bigger group can bring a stronger force to bring down corporate rule. Also, making their Occupy more successful, Occupiers conduct sit-ins and heckling candidates. [#5]  He states that “Relationships with labor unions, the natural allies of Occupy when they see as electoral politics, have been a mixed bag, with some unions, notably National Nurses United, strongly backing the protesters while others have kept their distance.”(Harrison). This quote shows that occupiers need to seek for labor unions and allied forces to be able to come up with a more persuasive force; it will enable the movement to move forward easily and successfully. [#3] Harrison and Michelle strongly claim having closer ties with others groups of people, so they can push through the movement to be easy reach success.    Harrison- and Michelle’s perspective indicates that if Occupiers want to have a successful Occupy movement, they should have a bigger allied group such as unions or students.
            In addition to that, Laird Harrison’s and Sekar Ashara- , Deborah Soung’s articles have similar perspectives. [#4] Even though Laird Harrison’s perspective plays a positive way,  Askhara- and Deborah’s perspectives are more positive than his because it  describes the occupy movement, which leads me to come up with the second question which is that “Why do occupiers have to mobilize students or leaders?” Askhara and Deborah,  of whom are Occupiers, write for the Saratoga Falcon, and argue that choosing leader and agreeing on common goals will keep the movement organizing because they can easier to achieve their goals of changing society.[#6]  Askhara and Deborah state that “having a leader does not mean stooping to corruption; having a leader who proves more efficient, effective and trustworthy than the likes of largely disliked corporate officials such as Leo Apotheker, former CEO [chief executive officer] of Hewlett- Packard, means elevating the movement about the level of the mighty One Percent.” It shows that the main point of the Occupy movement needs the leaders. They mention that when Occupiers have leaders, they may persist in occupy movement until they are successful.  The same perspective is expressed that leaders can help occupiers to reach their goals easily because occupiers believe leaders themselves have the same goals. Their perspective is a powerful point to be successful in the occupy movement.  To put things back in perspective, even though Laird’s article is similar to Akshara- and Deborah’s, Nichols and Harrision’s article only mentions that students and unions can change the fabric of national banks, and she doesn’t define the evidences and explanations enough. Without enough relevant evidences, Harrison makes a negative perspective in her article. Therefore, I think Akshara– and Deborah’s articles are more informative and effective than Laird’s.
            I tend to agree with Akshara - and Deborah’s perspective because the Occupy movement having real leaders and goals can help Occupiers to make successful Occupy activities. I think that their Occupy movement is valid because they can establish a better economy in the United Stated. Akshara and Deborah make a powerful point, which is that leaders provide more energy to the occupiers, for leaders are effective to help occupiers to reach their goals. In addition, having leaders’ help, occupiers can easily solve their economic issues.  Even though I never see the occupy movement, with reading the three articles, I feel that if occupiers have leaders, it will be easier than do it by themselves.

                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                  
                         


                                                Works Cited
Sekar, Akshara, and Deborah Soung. “ The Occupy Movement Needs Leaders and Real              Goal. “The Occupy Movement. Ed.Stefan Kiesbye. Detroit: Greenhaven Press,
            2013. At Issue.Rpt. from “Occupy Movement in Need of Leaders and Goals.”
            Saratoga Falcon.org 2011. Occupy Viewpoings In Context. Web.1 Apr.2013.
Harrison,Larid and Michelle Nichols. “The occupiers Need to Mobilize Students and
Unions to Succeed.” The Occupy Movement.Ed.Stefan Kiesbye. Detroit: Greenhaven Predd,2013. At    Issue.Rpt. from“Occupy 2012: Movement Struggles ToEvolve,MaintainMomentum.”HunffingtonPost.com.2012.Opposing Viewpoints In Context. Web.1 Apr.2013.
Armoudian, Maria. “In Order to Succeed, the Occupy Movement Needs to Broaden Its
            Focus. “The Occupy Movement. Ed. Stefan Kiesbye. Detroit: Greenhaven Press,
            2013. At Issue. Rpt. From “How will the Occupy Movement Evolve?”
            Truth-out.org. 2012. Opposing Viewpoints In Context. Web.1 Apr. 2013.
                                                                                                                                                                                                                                               

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