Essay2 critique1

Cuihua Lin

Mr. Hayes

English 100[1:10-2:00]

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                                                Distracted Driving

            “Distracted Driving” an article published in a national problem by Gale, written about the subject of the distracted driving phenomenon in the US. This phenomenon reflects the people lack of experience on their driving. Gale believes that using the cell phones is the main points to lead driver distraction. I agree with his point of view. However, I think his points are not conveying all the reason for the distracted driving and is as a result is not convincing enough to his target audience – the national problems which include other reasons such as communication with passenger and eating things.

            As a person lives in the US, I drive the car every day here. I would have liked to read his view of points, which abundant testify by more evidence and express the real matter around our lives. I personally feel that I agree with many of issue discussed. In the article, Gale argued that using the cell phone was a main point of the national problem, which can make driver distraction, which I appreciated. I agree with his example, he pointed out the distracted driving looks like “inattention blindness.” With this issue, Gale indicate that drivers usually run red light, or get into a deadly collision because they fail to pay attention to things that are squarely in the field of vision. However, leading drivers fail to pay attention to things that may be eating something, or drinking too much when they are driving.

            It certainly is true that Gale wrote about the subject of the distraction driving. In 2009, the American Automobile Association did the survey. In the AAA poll, there are 58% of the drivers talking on cell phones while driving as a serious threat. In fact, most talking on cell phones while driving are teenagers because they inexperience drivers. I think that teenagers have those problems to follow their parents. Under their parents influenced that leads most teenagers to distract driving. In the distracted driving phenomenon, I suggest that Gale can cite more of reasons which lead a driver distraction such as communicate from their car despite the danger to themselves or drive own car to long too enough time to sleep.

            I think there’s a practical problem with this phenomenon. Gale point out the reason might can help drivers distraction, but it is not only the reason help drivers distraction. Then I don’t think talking on cell phones is the main point to lead drive distraction. If drivers passages with others while they are driving, they would be unsafe because they couldn’t pay attention to drive. Also, if a driver drive too long to enough time to sleep, they would be get accident easily because of the tired eyes lead him/ her to drive careless.

            Even though I think that a driver talk cell phone while they are driving car is not the main reason, this subject invokes many issues. Overall, I agree with Gale’s claim “ Distracted Driving.” However, lacking example makes him argument weaker. He should added more explanation to the national problems.